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Hey guys, the name is Chad.I was sitting around doing nothing when this idea for a character popped into mind.

It's a bit of a grotesque sort of character, but I'd like to hear what you guys think!

Alright, where do I start... Okay so the once saint-like man (don't have a name) is possessed by a ruthless demon (oh how cliche). He wears a black suit and a black top hat. The buttons of his suit are red to represent the demon flowing through his body. Under the suit is a red, button up shirtto represent the pure evil that is barred with in his soul, buttons up shirts are easy to tear open, so the demon is still very easy to be released. (cliche still, don't worry I got my own ideas coming up!).

The top hat is black to represent death, but there is a red silk band around the hat. It depicts blood as well death, but the silk represents purity. It can also be looked at as a halo around the head. The top hat is tilted forward to represent concealing the mans power, it also blocks his eyes as the iris (coloured part) is red, but the sclera is pure white to represent the purity of the man still inside the mans soul.

The man wears white gloves to counter act the death the demon brings.

I quite like the idea of his shoes. The top of the shoes black, while the sole is white. The white sole represents the 'block' between the demon re entering the depths of hell, as every step the man takes is pure due to the holy sole.

That's all I can come up with for now. Sorry about my horrible grammar and what not. Down here in Australia we finished school, I've been off school for a week and my IQ has probably dropped by fiffty points

Tell me what you think, negative comments are alright but I'd ask if they had reason.

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Hi Chad

Well - he sounds an interesting character with good potential.  Many of Fiona's characters are like this - both good and evil - and it makes for a much more believable character.

All you need to do now is give him a bit of story - how did the evilness enter into him; how does he get rid of the evil inside him or does he - perhaps he always retains a bit of evil in him. How do other characters react to his presence; what sort of world are you going to put him in?

You've made a great start - all you need to do now is keep writing.  Set yourself a word limit per day and stick to it and you'll eventually find yourself with a short story or novel on your hands.

Good luck with your school results.

Mdx

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Hi Chad,

I agree, he sounds an interesting fellow - and I hope you reintroduce him to us again!

I know you have just started, so I might just write my first thoughts and then maybe your next instalments will have the answers for me.

I imagined him tilting his hat before you said that - so that fitted for me.  I like some things being natural progressions of my predictions in parts of novels.

Red (ie the silk sash and sclera) representing purity and a halo wasn't a natural progression for me, so i would need you to explain that to me as a reader further.  You have me intrigued that he can still have purity in his sole I guess?

The white sole being a block and also indicating pure steps was also not a natural progression for me.  Probably because I was wanting to believe something else of him ... ie the way I was imagining him from your very good details in regards to blood etc.

So, I look forward to your future ideas Chad!

Thanks!

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Chad, I have reread and realised the Sclera was white - sorry bout that.

I also realised you meant the silk was the purity factor - so cancel those out for me - I just needed to reread again .... sorry!

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Hello, sorry for the late reply.

I've been throwing around idea's when ever the idea pops into mind. One idea I idea I came up with is that this demon must prove its worthyness to maybe satan or balthazar, and that this particular demon possessed a soul and is reigning terror on the earth to prove its worthyness.

Maybe this particular demon was given a set time before he is <add idea here> (can't kill a demon...) and that the white soles are buying him time.

It'll take a bit more thinking as already I'm not too happy with the idea posted above

I'll continue to update as ideas pop into my head!

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Those sound pretty cool ideas!

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In a complete change of pace. What if this particular character was a leader of some sort of gang, organisation or faction?

Over throw the government, beat the government, claim 'gang turf' etc etc is far too cliche for my liking... But there really isn't any other sort of story line which can fit this character/characters which isn't cliche I guess..,

I also had an idea of basing the story upon a quote which stood out for me when I watched V for Vendetta. It is from Shakespeare's Richard III, Act I Scene 3  "...And seem a saint when most I play the devil."

In saying that, our character could have been a POW for decades from a young child. The particular child could have been the son of a political leader of some sort. The good thing about having war a theme in the novel is that the war could be over anything, from lack of resources to anarchy. Though highly unlikely, our character, over decades of imprisonment could have asked for literature from the people of whom imprisoned him  to pass the time as his life slowly withered away.

Thus, our character can "seem a saint", thought wanting revenge of what was done to him he can "play the devil". Not only could our character want revenge, he could bring down those that are in power and those that started the plague of fascism.

Re-reading what I just typed, it it quite similar to that of 'V' from V for Vendetta. Scrap the above idea.

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My idea for you chad is that a wrong done to your character (whether being held as a prisoner, treated badly or anything else) could have caused anger in the character which opened the path for the demon or evil to enter through. This could lead to the story being a struggle between good and evil to do put things right or get revenge or something like that.

Just some ideas for you.